Here is my CEP eval for your performance. My notes and recommendations follow:
1. You will see several minutes above that start with Laugh #2. That’s because a laugh was counted, but was less than a second — the software only records laugh duration for laughs that are a second or longer.
Note: Seconds of laughs generated each minute is more important and a better performance indicator than the number of laughs.
2. I don’t count laughs by just a few audience members (unless it’s an accident) – only those where a good portion of the audience laughs.
3. I would consider this set an exceptional performance for your first time on stage!
1. I would take the time to transcribe this entire performance word for word.
Specifically, you want to put this material into Single Line Format, broken up by your breath pauses and other pauses.
Note: Spoken word lines are NOT from the beginning of a sentence to the ending punctuation.
If you will do that, you will see that throughout your set that you will have 1-2 more spoken word lines than you want before your some of your punchlines.
This will help you tighten your material if you stick with the 3 line rule (try to have only 1-3 spoken word lines before a punchline once a topic has been has been introduced).
2. Check out the number of times you say “um” and “you know”. Those are just time wasters and can be eliminated with proper rehearsal.
3. Had your head been up more and had you made eye contact with ALL the audience (you focused on the audience in the middle and on your left), your laughter impact would have been significantly greater.
See the training module on rehearsal for details.
4. Your timing is pretty darn good throughout your set. Didn’t really see you running over laughs.
5. Your impressions are good. You may want to rearrange your set to get some of that action earlier into your set.
If you will focus on these things, I believe that you will be delivering headliner level stand-up comedy material in relatively few performances, provided you can get in front of audiences of 15-20+ who are properly seated and attentive to your show.